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At CMDR's request, I'd like to consolidate some of the thinking and help lay out what's going down in the storyline a little better for the other writers.

-Part 1 - Timeline -

EDIT: Updated again - 6/13/11

The way the story's taken shape now, here's a rough timeline of what's going down. I'll put line items next to each other if they occur approximately the same time.

-night before-
    Sith Part 1 - Gragus Observes Smugglers' arrival
    Smuggler Part 1 - Smugglers' arrival on Coruscant
    Jedi Knight Part 1 - Attack on Jedi Temple


-next morning-
    Smugglers Part 2 - Sith Part 2 - Gragus Prax Account
    Jedi Knight Part 2 - Fleeing the Temple
    Sacking of Coruscant Continues - Trooper Part 1
    Jedi Knight Part 3 - Dropping off the Younglings
    Trooper Part 2
    Jedi Knight Part 4
    Smuggler Part 3 - Smugglers enter sub-basement, Ambush
    Trooper part 3 - Trooper Part 4 - Jedi Knight Part 5
    Smuggler Part 4 - Enter the Finx
    Consular Part 1 - Exiting Hyperspace


-afternoon-
    Smuggler Part 5 - Finx and Tika Vast meet, escape
    Consular Part 2 - Landfall
    Sith Part 3 - Drakune Embress Account
    Smuggler Part 6 - Smugglers Ascend into WeatherNet proper
    Consular Part 3 - BH Ambush


-evening-

    Consular Part 4, Sith duel - Consular Part 5, Quan vs. BH
    Smuggler Part 7 - Meet the Pirates (Finx & Tika Meet the Others)

    Consular Part 6, Duel resolution, bridges to night


-night-
    Sith Part 4 - Drakune reports to Nethara
    Smuggler Part 8 - Enter the Tunnels
    Sith Part 5 - Gragus Tracks the Smugglers
    Consular Part 7, Consulars Enter WeatherNet
    Smuggler Part 9 - Farewell, Sweet Joker

    At this point, our stories will be converging, in the middle of the night after the sacking. Massive battle, resistance vs. Sith, we will discuss this further when we get there.


-dawn-
    With the timeline we've got going here, I plan on beautifully, and poetically wrapping up our victory, with Ral Strayer sacrificing himself as the sun rises on a war torn Coruscant. I have that whole scene written in my head already, pretty much, should be a piece of cake.

-epilogue-

    Account of Honoring and Formation of Pax Republica, told by Tika Vast, wrapping up the story


- Part 2 - Getting to WeatherNet -

Describing these events from 1st person, for our heroes, is actually doing us a favor. Reason being is that each group only knows what they've encountered, until we all come together inside the facility, which doesn't happen til roughly halfway through our chain of events.

That means that until each group has entered the facility, I've tried to leave the writers with a lot of freedom to do WHATEVER you want with the storyline. Each sequence of events, until we're all in the facility, is unique to that group. It's a blank slate for the two of you. I'll handle fitting your passages into the timeline of the rest of the story. I've got a pretty clear picture of the entire story going on in my head right now, I just need to make sure you two are on the same page.

The only real task you have with the "Getting to WeatherNet" sections of your account is to develop your characters, however you see fit. That's the only real opportunity you have to work in their backstories, and let the reader get to know the interesting details that make each character unique.

- Part 3 - Entering WeatherNet and Epilogue -

Action is going to kick up fast here. Think of Weathernet as a massive, cross-shaped facility for now, with a large central atrium where the Sith are headquartered, and wings sprawled out in each cardinal direction. The West Wing is where the troopers, and the Mainframe are barricaded, which is why the Sith haven't already seized control.

When the other accounts catch up, we can discuss as a group how to bring this all together smoothly.

I think once you get more down on paper for your stories, it'll become more evident how easy it's really going to be to tie it all together.

I'll take care of the outsider perspectives, like the Bounty Hunters, that are giving us some color and a look at events that we wouldn't see otherwise.

I'll keep updating this timeline, so it makes more sense as you fill in your stories.

As always, holler if you have questions, I don't want to make this too confusing, but I also want a great story worthy of our time.

So far, I wouldn't change a thing with how it's coming together. We're shaping up to be the only TOR guild with its own Novel depicting our foundation, and it's going to kick ass.

That thought alone is pretty exciting.


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helps some prisoners escape into ventilation shafts


Why there are always huge ventilation shafts... SW Engineers can't make smaller ventilation shafts or just put rotor there? And they are always non protected... :D

But returning to topic :D

It's sound great for me.
Now I'm getting this whole plot... I was trying to put Consular part during Troopers Mission and I can't find sense... Now I see all the ideas very clear :D

It's good plan for my opinion.


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helps some prisoners escape into ventilation shafts


Why there are always huge ventilation shafts... SW Engineers can't make smaller ventilation shafts or just put rotor there? And they are always non protected... :D

But returning to topic :D

It's sound great for me.
Now I'm getting this whole plot... I was trying to put Consular part during Troopers Mission and I can't find sense... Now I see all the ideas very clear :D

It's good plan for my opinion.


QFT about the ventilation shafts ; ) I thought about how cliched it was, but part of me feels like certain cliches are what make Star Wars the thing we know and love, e.g. shady smugglers, peppy droids, awkward romance, convenient escapes, and melodramatic villains. At this point, I won't plan on changing it unless we decide it's just too corny. It wouldn't be Star Wars without that one serving of corn that makes it part of a well-balanced breakfast, though.

Awesome...as you can see there are blanks in the timeline to fill in. I'm only putting up there right now what I've already written, or know for sure is going to happen. Other details are always subject to change, as we see fit. As you guys post what you've written, I'll place the piece in the timeline, so we can all keep a good sense of who's doing what, and when they're doing it.

The only thing I'm sure of in the final battle is that Gai should be "tanking" the Sith Lord, the main one engaged in combat with Darth Ravenous. We should probably have him finish at least one Sith apprentice/fighter along the way, to build up his character a bit. We need to make sure the founder is well represented, and the only person on near-equal footing with the main antagonist.

Both Bounty Hunters will probably survive like we discussed in another thread. Nethara will probably engage the resistance (troopers) at the West Wing for a little while, before breaking off to try to stop the smugglers inside the Mainframe in the west wing. I kind of left the other Chiss agent for Cluster to do whatever he wanted with. We'll see if he survives to the final scene ; )

While they're in the mainframe fighting, Strayer will probably get wounded...he and the other smugglers will finish off Nethara somehow, and that's when the whole heroic sacrifice thing is going to come in, he volunteers to stay behind and guard the console with his life, until the program to disable the mainframe completes its work.

Keep posting your ideas or questions, this is really fun for me : )


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AstralProjection wrote:

While they're in the mainframe fighting, Strayer will probably get wounded...he and the other smugglers will finish off Nethara somehow, and that's when the whole heroic sacrifice thing is going to come in, he volunteers to stay behind and guard the console with his life, until the program to disable the mainframe completes its work.

Keep posting your ideas or questions, this is really fun for me : )


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Updated, to include the recent additions from the Smuggler Story!


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This is more just for CMDR, but if anyone else has thoughts or suggestions feel free to add them -

I've been thinking about the Troopers sealing off the West Wing and Mainframe. When you're writing your story, we should probably make sure we mention that you guys bring sentry guns and and some security droids with you.

I've been thinking about the first part of the story, and I think it may make more sense, from a plausability standpoint, to have you guys arrive in an APC (Armored Personnel Carrier) instead of a shuttle. In fact, I was thinking maybe we could have you guys crash it right through the western entrance, and cave that part in around you...you come pouring out on the inside like the intergalactic badasses you are, and you simultaneously blocked them from following you in from that entrance.

Seeing how the rest of things are taking shape right now, and from how we explained your situation, being on Coruscant to visit Greeata's family, you would've already been on the surface.

If I have Ardhel round you guys up on the surface, and head there in an APC, it could be filled with fortifications, like a few sentry droids and gun turrets that you deploy upon your arrival.

It would make more sense that the handful of you are holding off such a big Sith force, if the entrance wasn't just barricaded and collapsed, but you also had some sweet defensive equipment set up.

Don't forget the anti-personnel mines!

Let me know your thoughts...if you're okay with it I'd like to tweak that first account just a little so you're not on a shuttle, but I also don't want to mess around with anything unless everyone agrees.


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I`m cool with that.

We will get bak at them for Jedi temple in similar way ^_^


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Well... I used shuttle as Coruscant equivalence of something like APC.
I was thinking about something like Sentinel Class Shuttle, because Coruscant is planet of Skyscrapers... There is hard to reach many places by ground (very dangerous place) or even by platform (without safety fences too).

I'm planing entering by this shuttle (with some another too) during firefight, chased by enemy fighters with little Republic Escort. And enter similar to Yoda's assault with clones in Episode II.


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Well... I used shuttle as Coruscant equivalence of something like APC.
I was thinking about something like Sentinel Class Shuttle, because Coruscant is planet of Skyscrapers... There is hard to reach many places by ground (very dangerous place) or even by platform (without safety fences too).

I'm planing entering by this shuttle (with some another too) during firefight, chased by enemy fighters with little Republic Escort. And enter similar to Yoda's assault with clones in Episode II.


Okay, that makes a lot of sense. I was thinking spacebound shuttle but you were thinking more of an aerospace shuttle. I'll tweak the descriptions in the first account so that's clear, I think that's perfect then.

Awesome!


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Updated once again. Still looks like it's coming together nicely. If it's not, I blame Gai and Kbrury for being so damn helpful all the time.


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Just to give everyone an update -

I'm currently re-reading the entire compilation I have to date, and making more fixes, and slight alterations to make the story a little more plausible. By the time you re-read it you'll all probably only notice subtle differences, but to an obsessive nerd like me I think they made a big difference in its readability. Most of it is honestly pulling out commas, which I generally put way too many of in my rough drafts, but some paragraphs have been either entirely reworked or added as well.

I have given Finx a copy of the passages we've written so far, placed in their correct order...it's the evolving "rough draft" of the entire piece. I gave him the original iteration, which was pretty much what was posted on these forums verbatim.

If anyone would like to read the latest version placed in sequential order, just PM me with your e-mail address and I'll send you the finished product when I'm finished this round of edits.

I understand CMDR is going to have another piece for us soon, despite his LOA, and hopefully when Cluster's school issues settle down we should have some more stuff on the way from him, too.

I'd offer to help write some of those, but I really don't want this to be just me writing everything when we all came up with the ideas together, and I know you were all just as excited about writing your parts as i was.

Like I mentioned before, when I'm done with this round of edits, I'll write the few pieces that I still can without waiting for the others to catch up, and we'll see where we're at. If we're going too slow, let me know. I think our writers' RL situations (my own included) are the only things holding us back really, otherwise we're all doing great.


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I'm fine with the pace everyone is at right now, all I care about is that it is all finished before TOR is released.


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Just giving an update - work set back my timetable by a couple weeks, but I've finished editing what we've got done for now. Fired off a copy to Durstalph at his request, and another one to Finx...if anyone else wants it just holler.

Expect the pieces I've been mentioning to appear in this forum over the next couple weeks. Hopefully Cluster and CMDR come back soon. Thanks everyone for your patience!


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I return to writing today. Sorry for delay.


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