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re: Peer Review and check - Trooper Part 3

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I was sitting next to Jasla and looking around by macrobinoculars. I knew that using sensors will inform enemy, that we’re closing and approaching undetected was our biggest advantage, but it looks like holo-movie about ancients wars. Just like in movie. There wasn’t only silent, climatically music, which will be suddenly stop, when someone will shout: “INCOMING!”. I must smiled, because Rodian asked me, why I’m so happy.

-I just can’t wait to kick some Sith’s butts. – I lied and put down binoculars. Alvar, my friend and mentor, always repeat “Eyes are more exact, then best device” though he don’t probably said this about looking for distant spaceships. I looked around. We flew through upper levels of Coruscant, recently full of airspeeders and now ominous empty. Our two assault shuttles with troopers and one with droids and heavy equipment were escorted only by 8 fighters. Two another shuttles and two fighters fly behind us. That wasn’t big forces, but that was everything we can get. I was hoping that this rumors that rear shuttles carries Jedi was true, not just rumor.

-What’s around, Lee? – asked lieutenant Ardhel, entering cockpit.
-It’s clear. – I answered and again looked by macrobinoculars. Arhdel showed to Jasla some postcard and asked her about possibility to landing on Weathernet’s roof. I didn’t seen that postcard, but Ms. Jasla was very nervous. She told something about a little maneuver space there, no cover and enemy forces. I didn’t listen her, because I was really focused. Alvar told me once that Jedi can be so focused, that they don’t do any mistakes. I must be like them now. Any second now is very important. One second can change victory into defeat. Argument between Arhdel and Jasla wasn’t helping. I put down microbinoculars and listened.

Quickly I noticed, that Ardhel plan must be impossible or Jasla han’t enough skill to perform that landing. And maybe both. “Flying is for droids” – I think. Droid knew, what can do and what can’t. Living beings never knew, what they are capable to do, as always Alvar repeated. To be honest I knew, that I don’t know what’s my limits, however I had to reach them I next battle. Only extreme situation show our true skills.
-Just land as close this point, as you can! – shouted Arhdel and left the cockpit.
-As you wish! – answered Jasla and muttered – This madness can’t work...
Again I take microbinoculars and looked around. I was lucky, that I can do something useful. Sergeant Koon just sit in Trooper Compartment and wait. He can’t do anything. He probably felt powerless this time. Waiting is worst part of any action... and moment, when many beings make biggest mistakes.
-Twenty seconds to left cover. – reported Jasla. That means that we soon climb over the skyscrapers. This will be end of sneaking and begun of battle. I’ve hope that Siths didn’t know that we’re coming. I don’t like traps. Even fool can set it and be proud, that defeat enemy. I catch comm console, when Rodian pull steering gear and shuttle started to climb.

Soon we flew over skyscrapers. I didn’t seen siege of Coruscant from above yet. It wasn’t this capital I seen so much time. Coruscant Prime was close to starset and glow sharp, red light. All these fires and smokes made it looking like volcanic planet. Sith fighters flied among this smokes like nasty flies. We were lucky, that they didn’t spotted us yet. But this was only second till they do it. WeatherNet building was directly in front of us.
-By the.... – started Jasla looking around, but she become silent, keeping course. I watched any Sith starship. Which one seen us first? It wasn’t necessary to watch them longer than 5 seconds.
-INCOMING! AT TWO, ABOVE! – I shouted.

Four fighters flied ahead to encounter the enemy before they reach us. We were very close to WeatherNet, but it looks so distant. I catch comm console, when I noticed that Jasla is preparing for dodge. Fighters passed Sith Interceptor, surrounded by lasers bolts. I seen that one of Interceptors dive fast covered by black smoke, when Rodian strongly push steering gear. Coruscant’s roofs rotated in cockpit window very fast and I remembered what I eat for dinner. Jasla stop spinning for one second... only for begun of loop. When we start diving I saw our other ships. Sith Interceptors approached from all sides. I saw also one strange Sith ship. It doesn’t look like other fighters. Was bigger and nimbler that others. Shining amour deflected evil red light like bloodthirsty beast. I lost it for sight, when we returned to horizontal fly.
-They shoot us down, if we stop! – shouted Jasla – Am I supposed to land here?!
-I think so-oooooooooooooooooo! – I screamed when Jasla again put our shuttle in crazy maneuvers. I saw WeatherNet tower in any direction I was able to see. Laser bolts from Sith Interceptor chased us whole time. Someone reported:
-We’ve two mynocks on tail!
-I can shake them! – shouted Jasla and head straight into WeatherNet. I was going to ask her, what’s she doing, when she start looping again Siths shooted behind us. I again seen that bigger enemy fighter. It was closing to one of our shuttles, firing deadly lasers at our forces. Shuttle disappear in big blow, when Sith passed next to them. Only small, burning parts left explosion. Sith shacked wings. I felt anger. I would like be inside this fighter and kick ass of that pilot.
-Arhdel! – Jasla shouted – Next stop: Roof! PREPARE!
Next spin was worst then earlier. I can’t find, where are we going, until I again seen wall of WatherNet. It was in front of us and we were closing very fast. I looked at one of monitors. Two Sith Interceptors still followed us. Our light blaster gun wasn’t strong enough to shoot them down. It mainly distract them. Then I felt cold. This bigger Sith’s fighter was behind us.
-Watch this, Nerfdrop’! – shouted Jasla
Enemy opened fire with it’s four laser cannons. Big explosion shaken our shuttle, when Jasla pull steering gear. All light fade out, emergency alarm started to buzzing and all working monitors showed long lines of errors.
-Watch what?! – I shouted at her. Frightened she looked on monitors, like she was hoping that there is something that can save us. One moment later she looked in front and started wild scream. I looked too. We were closing wall very fast.
-DIVE!!!!! – was last word I shouted before impact. One microsecond later durasteel girder crashed cockpit window among me and Jasla. Cockpit blow up with millions sparks, even emergency lights fade out and I heard only crashing and screaming. Suddenly all quieted down.

I catch my lighting rod and turn it. Our shuttle was mess. Troopers, gears and parts were everywhere. Lucky for us, all of us were alive. Almost... When I helped Jasla stand up I noticed that girder pierce Ardhel’s leg and nailed him to wall. I quickly left cockpit and run to him. Sergeant Koon was faster. He took medpack, but it can’t help him. Injection can only fade pain away. Lieutenant was aware that he is too wounded to fight or even too survive. When Wo made him injection, Ardhel told us:
-Listen, guys... I know that you’re the best troopers I ever met.... And I know you’ll do the best job... Don’t care of me. Just go... Sergeant Koon is taking command. I’ll be fine... But you must complete the job!
Wo tried to oppose: - But, sir. We can...
-JUST GO! – shouted Ardhel and pointed at Kel Dor. – THIS IS ORDER! Do you understand, trooper?!
Wo stand in silence for few seconds. Arhdel wrinkled brow and said:
-I asked: Do you understand?
Kel Dor voice wasn’t sound enthusiast.
-Yes, sir... – he stand in silence for few seconds, then kicked exit doors, which felt into messed WeatherNET conference room, where we crashed.
-FOLLOW ME! – he ordered and jumped. Other trooper followed him. Jasla and me too. When I was going to jump, I looked at Arhdel. He sat nailed to wall and keeping medpack in hands.
-We’ll meet after battle. – I said to him – I promise, sir.
He smiled to me and answered.
-I’m sure... But now Lee, go...
I felt that he is lying, but I’ve job to do. I jumped into rubled floor. We made it! We reached WeatherNet! But this was just begun....


I've hope you like it. :D
I didn't write what's happen with heavy equipment and two other shuttles, because Astral can use it for own ideas :D Also this can be only rumours that two rear shuttles carried Jedi... Or not :D
I'll be happy if someone make it "more English" :D


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